Talk:Gary Tuggle/GA1

GA Review

Passed. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 23:41, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Queen of Hearts (talk · contribs) 02:32, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Vigilantcosmicpenguin (talk · contribs) 04:46, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Prose is clear.
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Lead section summarizes the article. Sections are the right length and organized chronologically. No WTW issues.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. References are listed.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Article is sourced to reliable news sources.
2c. it contains no original research. No OR.
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. No copyvio detected
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Article mentions the key points of Tuggle's career.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Article gives an appropriate amount of detail.
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Article is neutral.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Article is stable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. All images are free to use.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Image captions describe the images' relevance to the article.
7. Overall assessment. Looks good.

Initial comments

  • Although Earwig predicts a 47.1% chance of copyvio, this is mainly direct quotes, so it's ok.
  • I'll be doing some minor copyedits myself.

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Lead section

  • The infobox and the lead should specify January 2019, right?
    Annoyingly, the sources aren't clear on this: we know Harrison was selected in January and sworn in during March, but I can't find any sources on when Harrison actually entered office and Tuggle left. I'll add an efn to that effect. – QoH
  • is an American police officer and former Drug Enforcement Administration (DEA) agent
    done – QoH
  • as one of ten children is not relevant for the lead.
    done – QoH
  • I don't think the Newark, Delaware thing is significant for the lead.
    done – QoH
  • he resigned four days later The exact length of time that De Sousa took to resign isn't relevant for the lead.
    done – QoH
  • As acting commissioner, Tuggle suspended an officer after a video of him assaulting a man went viral, the BPD began implementing its ShotSpotter system, and broke ground on a new headquarters for the BPD's mounted police. → As acting commissioner, Tuggle suspended an officer who had been filmed assaulting a man, oversaw the implementation of the BPD's ShotSpotter system, and broke ground on a new headquarters for the BPD's mounted police.
    done – QoH

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Early life and career

  • This section looks good.

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Drug Enforcement Administration

  • Do sources not chronologically detail his tenure at each city? The current phrasing is a bit odd with how it lists the cities.
    No, annoyingly. – QoH
    Hm. I've rephrased it myself to remove some repetitiveness (like saying "Bridgetown" and then "the Caribbean"), but I'm still not satisfied with my phrasing if we can't list it chronologically. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 23:39, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • After he was appointed, he said he would continue to fight heroin and prescription drug abuse, by targeting drug trafficking rings and educating the public. I don't see this as worth including. Just seems like something any drug enforcement officer would say, unless there's specific actions.
    done – QoH

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Return to the Baltimore Police Department

  • he said on February 13 This date isn't really relevant.
    done – QoH
  • I think "the aftermath of the Gun Trace Task Force scandal" is meaningless to readers without some context.
    I've removed that claim since it's OR anyway (the article just says "the convictions of a team of detectives-turned-robbers"). – QoH
  • I don't see why Marcinko's and Hite's opinions matter here.
    removed – QoH
  • I think there's too much detail about the assault on McGrier.
    tried to cut some – QoH
  • We shouldn't mention the name of the assault perpetrator; it's verging on a BLP issue.
    removed – QoH
  • did not think Pugh disapproved of his withdrawal This speculation by Tuggle can be removed since an actual response from Pugh is mentioned in the next sentence.
    done – QoH
  • despite Tuggle claiming the department was improving "every single day" This synthesis is POV.
    just removed the claim – QoH

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Personal life

  • I think "he is married with four children" is something we can say in present tense.
    done – QoH
  • This section is only one sentence. I think it should be merged into "Early life and career" as "Early and personal life", as some biographies do.
    done, although I just titled it "biography" – QoH

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 05:23, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Source spotcheck

  1. Y Y Y Y
  2. Y Y Y Y Y Y Y
  3. Y But the source says the cash was $48,000, which would be more precise than $40,000.
  4. Y Y Y Also, it looks like Cassella is the correct spelling: this was published by the BPD.
  5. N This source does not mention Cassella
    I think this is intended to verify "On February 9, 2018, BPD commissioner Darryl De Sousa announced changes to the management of the BPD"? But that's already in the other source, so just removed. – QoH
  6. Y
  7. Y
  8. Y
  9. Y
  10. Y Verifies that he was police chief of New Orleans
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